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  i loved the way you drawed it , specially the outifit and also the pose was perfect ! and also for their bodies and clothes .. they were great
 great job ^^ and for the light effect if was pretty great too , and it was also simple , wich maked it look even prettier and maked the drawing look more better , i also loved the way you made light's side red and L's side blue it was pretty amazing , and i guess Light"s weapon was prettyh Awsome too well he some how he looked like Genesis from FF VII crisis core x3Comments i don't think this was a critique.. it's just a praising comment to be posted at the top. i think critiques points out the good and the bad and telling how to turn the bad into good. I'm not one thats good at giving critiques unless they're inexperienced but sakimichan is far from it so I myself cannot see the flaws currently.
o_O i didn't know ? Besides , i didn't find anything bad in it anywayz .. i didn't really know ^^' srry besides , this one was a long time ago .
 ((Sorry, but I'm a Grammar Nazi)) Too many mistakes XP (And I'm from Indonesia)
It's supposed to be like this: "I loved the way you drew it , especially the outfit and also the pose was perfect! And also for their bodies and clothes, they were great. Great job! ^^ And for the light effect it was pretty great too, and it was also simple, which made it look even prettier and made the drawing look better, I also loved the way you made Light's side red and L's side blue. It was pretty amazing , and I guess Light's weapon was pretty awesome too. Well he somehow looked like Genesis from FF VII:Crisis Core! x3"  Oh give it up!! I'm a grammar Nazi too but I don't go targeting people when it's not their first language.
Your grammar isn't perfect and the flow of your sentences are still bad. I don't care if it's not your first language, leave them alone. Don't correct other people until you get a good feel for the language yourself. Thank you. x.x; <333  For some reason I'm not surprised a bunch of people who looked at a Death Note fanart are all kinda weird about that grammar and spelling of a critique. lol XD
 XD I saw it and I cringed. I had to check the comments to see if anybody was thinking like me. Hehe
 Not to be a bigger Grammar Nazi but you only fixed spelling mistakes, the grammar is still painful. let me take a crack at it:
"I loved the way you drew this piece, The outfits and poses are perfect! I also love the way you drew their bodies and clothes. Those along with the light effect are amazing, you also made the scene simple with elegance. The symbolic color hues on Light and L's sides of the piece were flawless as well, and the scythe? bad-ass. Though he kind of looks like Genesis from FF VII:Crisis Core... Great piece all in all." |
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